Red Lab Day 9-29 : Rage for Words (not a journal)
COMPLETE THIS WORK DURING CLASS THURSDAY IN THE TECH LAB (OR FINISH FOR HOMEWORK). YOU MAY WORK WITH A PARTNER. THIS IS NOT A JOURNAL RESPONSE, BUT AN IN-CLASS ASSIGNMENT. FINISH FOR HOMEWORK IF NECESSARY.
Your senior classmates have provided some sentences that show a mastery of the English language, maybe even a "rage for words." Take a close look at each sentence and tell me what rhetorical "trick" gives these words "life" beyond their mere literal meanings.
What do I mean by a rhetorical trick?
With a classmate (or by yourself), analyze each sentence to discover the "rhetorical trick."
Post your "answers" on the blog, giving your initials and section color, of course (the first sentence is an example of what I'd like you to do). Some of these sentences will appear as questions on your first test.
"When we arrived in Chicago, we could breathe the music."
[music is being compared to air, a metaphor] jtf purple
Work with these sentences or groups of sentences:
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
What do I mean by a rhetorical trick?
Words come to life when they're arranged in figures of speech (metaphors, similes, paradoxes, oxymorons, personification, etc), images, sound patterns (alliteration, assonance), or rhetorical questions. Writing certain sentence patterns (parallel structure) add emphasis. Using crisp action verbs can kick-start a sentence.
The Greeks called this creation of powerful language "rhetoric." It was once a studied, practiced, and revered skill of the Greek citizenry. These days, the use of artful language gets suspicious looks because rhetoric is usually associated with unctuous politicians or ambitious advertisers who are selling themselves or their products.
With a classmate (or by yourself), analyze each sentence to discover the "rhetorical trick."
Post your "answers" on the blog, giving your initials and section color, of course (the first sentence is an example of what I'd like you to do). Some of these sentences will appear as questions on your first test.
"When we arrived in Chicago, we could breathe the music."
[music is being compared to air, a metaphor] jtf purple
Work with these sentences or groups of sentences:
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
posted by JTF @ 9:38 AM
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24 Comments:
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon. (the power of 3)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork. (hyperbole)
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother. (parallel structure)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her. (melted=good action verb)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to. (hyperbole, metaphor)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something. (metaphor)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital. (simile)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live. (parallel structure)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became. (metaphor, parallel structure)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back. (power of 3)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow. (metaphor, personification)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poker hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. (metaphor)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song. (metaphor)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family. (metaphor)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents. (hyperbole)
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am. (power of 3)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up. (good action verbs, dialogue)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please." (power of 3, dialogue)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States. (metaphor)
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim. (hyperbole)
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor. (simile)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible. (power of 4,paradox)
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
(metaphor-her car is her baby)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
(good imagery)
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously, critical older brother.
(power of 3 or 4)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(motion picture verb)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(Hyperbole, paradox)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(metaphor)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
(metaphor- compares his grandfather to a lion, and the hospital to a cage)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(hyperbole)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(metaphor- compared the trip to her skin tone)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
(metaphor-bare walls compared to an elephants back)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(personification)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
(metaphor)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(metaphor)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
(metaphor)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
(exaggeration, good sentence)
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(power of 3s)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
(paradox)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
(power of 3s, motion picture verb)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(power of 3s)
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
(hyperbole)
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
(metaphor, hyperbole)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(power of 3s, parallel structure)
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
(metaphor-her car is her baby)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
(good imagery)
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously, critical older brother.
(power of 3 or 4)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(motion picture verb)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(Hyperbole, paradox)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(metaphor)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
(metaphor- compares his grandfather to a lion, and the hospital to a cage)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(hyperbole)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(metaphor- compared the trip to her skin tone)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
(metaphor-bare walls compared to an elephants back)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(personification)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
(metaphor)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(metaphor)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
(metaphor)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
(exaggeration, good sentence)
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(power of 3s)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
(paradox)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
(power of 3s, motion picture verb)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(power of 3s)
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
(hyperbole)
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
(metaphor, hyperbole)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(power of 3s, parallel structure)
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon. [personification]
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork. [hyperbole, metaphor]
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother. [power of twelve, parallel structure]
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her. [metaphor, paradox]
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to. [hyperbole]
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something. [metaphor]
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital. [simile]
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live. [hyperbole]
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became. [metaphor, good comparison]
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back. [simile]
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow. [personification]
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. [simile]
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song. [metaphor]
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family. [metaphor]
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents. [hyperbole]
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am. [power of three]
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up. [good verbs]
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please." [hyperbole, motion picture verbs]
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States. [power of four, hyperbole]
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim. [parallel structure, motion picture verbs]
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor. [simile]
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible. [power of four]
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
(Metaphor)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
(imagery)
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
(rule of three or four)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(strong verbs)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(hyperbole)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(hyperbole)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
(metaphor)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(hyperbole)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(metaphor)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
(metaphor)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(assonance)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. (metaphor)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(metaphor)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
(metaphor)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
(exaggeration)
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(rule of three of four)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
(paradox)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
(rule of three or four)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(rule of three or four)
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
(hyperbole)
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
(metaphor)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(rule of three or four)
1. Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
-Power of three, personification of the car
2. I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
-Humorous exaggeration to express his anger
3. He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
-Repetition to emphasize his brother being overly critical
4. When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
-Use of metaphor (melting into my mother)
5. I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
-Exaggeration to illustrate the many times they have been to orthopedics
6. It was as if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
-Simile
7. Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
-Simile
8. My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
-Metaphor (dodging death)
9. I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
-Metaphor and comparison
10. There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
-Simile (as bare as elephant’s back)
11. As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
-Motion-picture verbs (slipped), personification (courage slipping and running)
12. I thought of myself as just an average card in a poker hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
-Simile
13. By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
-Metaphor
14. While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
-Figure of speech (winter f his years)
15. Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
-Humorous exaggeration
16. I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
-Personification of flaws, power of three
17. We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
-Motion-picture verbs (tormented)
18. I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded, "Two tickets, please."
-Motion-picture verbs (shot, strutted, demanded)
19. Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
-Descriptive (grease-filled pizza), humorous exaggeration (Utopia)
20. She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
-Motion-picture verbs (yelling and critiquing), exaggerated metaphor
(Breathe fire)
21. Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
-Simile (white as the ice)
22. He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
-Power of three, paradox
[the car is being called “my baby” and being made to seem like it’s life-like - personification]
[“he would come after me with a pitchfork” – imagery]
[“conversational companion” – assonance, “critical older brother…critical older brother…seriously critical older brother” – repetition of phrase/parallel structure]
[melted/wept – good action verbs, melted into my mom - hyperbole]
[“navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to” - hyperbole]
[“possessed by Cupid” – hyperbole]
[“Mark was like a lion in a zoo” – simile]
[can’t dodge death – hyperbole]
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became. [longer stayed, darker became – metaphor]
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back. [bare as an elephant’s back – metaphor]
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow. [“courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow” – personification]
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. [“just an average..nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless” – simile]
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song. [“not just a one-note song” – metaphor]
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family. [“winter of his years” – metaphor]
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents. [
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am. [“embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am” – paradox]
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up. [“tormented with chides of ‘smile’ and ‘say cheese’” – paradox]
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded, "Two tickets, please." [“shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded” – rule of three]
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States. [“grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurants” – rule of three/four]
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim. [“ready to breathe fire” – hyperbole]
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor. [“white as the ice surrounding me” – simile]
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible. [“drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn’t like, and is the most perfect animal possible” – rule of three/four, paradox]
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon. [Power of 3’s]
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork. [Pitchfork- devil, implied metaphor]
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother. [Critical older brother- repetition]
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital. [Comparing Uncle Mark to a lion- simile]
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her. [Melted into mom- alliteration; Melting into and weeping with her- becoming one- metaphor]
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live. [Dodged death- alliteration]
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became. [Comparing darker skin tone to becoming Panamanian- metaphor]
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to. [metaphor- know exactly where they’re going]
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something. [Cupid- allusion]
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back. [Power of 3’s, comparing bare walls to an elephant’s back- simile]
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow. [Courage slipped out of the tips of my toes- personification]
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. [Comparing one’s self to a card in a poke hand- simile]
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song. [Contrasting one’s self to a one-note song, saying they are more complex- metaphor]
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family. [Comparing winter to his old age- metaphor]
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
[Story-telling technique- strong opening sentence; hyperbole]
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am. [Power of 3’s]
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please." [Power of 3’s]
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States. [Power of 3’s; comparing the United States to “Utopia”]
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor. [Comparing ice to white face- simile]
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
[Power of 3’s]
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up. [personification- the words smile and say cheese were “tormenting” me; paradox- chides is negative]
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
(car is being compared to a baby- metaphor also could be personification)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
(he wouldn’t really go after the person with a pitchfork- hyperbole)
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
(“seriously critical older brother” is repeated 3 times- repetition or power of threes)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(“melted into my mom” –alliteration, and the person really couldn’t melt into her mom- hyperbole)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(couldn’t really navigate blindfolded- hyperbole)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(allusion to Greek Mythology)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
(Use of ‘like’ or ‘as’ – simile)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(he didn’t literally dodge death- hyperbole)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(comparing skin tone to being Panamanian- metaphor)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
(power of threes and use of ‘as’ – simile)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(courage being represented as having life- personification)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
(opposites with some truth- paradox)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(person being compared to a song- metaphor)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
(late in his life/cold time of life - metaphor)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
(someone who admits to being a compulsive liar – paradox)
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(power of threes- all good things about themselves)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
(paradox- smile and chide are somewhat opposite)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
(imagery verbs)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(Comparing Utopia to United States- metaphor)
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
(hyperbole- literally can’t breathe fire)
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
(use of ‘as’- simile and imagery with colors)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(paradox- describes bad things, then says it’s the perfect animal)
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
( personification)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
( come after me with a pitchfork, image )
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
(repetition, critical older brother)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(melted, image)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(blindfolded)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(possessed by Cupid)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
( uncle mark was like a lion in a zoo, simile)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(dodged death three times)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(compared trip to skin tone, more Panamanian)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
( walls bare as an elephant’s back,metaphor)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(courage, personification)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
(average card in a poke hand, metaphor)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(one-note song, metaphor)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
(into the winter of his years, metaphor)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
()
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(parallel structure)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
(tormented with chides)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
(parallel structure)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(Utopia,
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
( breathe fire,image )
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
( face white as the ice, metaphor)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(paradox, perfect animal)
jpred said...
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
( personification)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
( come after me with a pitchfork, image )
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
(repetition, critical older brother)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(melted, image)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(blindfolded)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(possessed by Cupid)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
( uncle mark was like a lion in a zoo, simile)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(dodged death three times)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(compared trip to skin tone, more Panamanian)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
( walls bare as an elephant’s back,metaphor)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(courage, personification)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
(average card in a poke hand, metaphor)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(one-note song, metaphor)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
(into the winter of his years, metaphor)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
()
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(parallel structure)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
(tormented with chides)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
(parallel structure)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(Utopia,
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
( breathe fire,image )
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
( face white as the ice, metaphor)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(paradox, perfect animal)
3:59 PM
jpred said...
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
( personification)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
( come after me with a pitchfork, image )
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
(repetition, critical older brother)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(melted, image)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(blindfolded)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(possessed by Cupid)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
( uncle mark was like a lion in a zoo, simile)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(dodged death three times)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(compared trip to skin tone, more Panamanian)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
( walls bare as an elephant’s back,metaphor)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(courage, personification)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
(average card in a poke hand, metaphor)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(one-note song, metaphor)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
(into the winter of his years, metaphor)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(parallel structure)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
(tormented with chides)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
(parallel structure)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(Utopia,
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
( breathe fire,image )
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
( face white as the ice, metaphor)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(paradox, perfect animal)
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon. (power of three)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.(imagery- come after me with a pitchfork)
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.(repetition- critical older brother)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.(imagery-melted)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something. (metaphor-possessed by cupid)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.(personification-uncle mark being a lion)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.(dodged death three times)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.( power of three)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.(simile- walls were as bare as an elephant’s back)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.(stepped over the threshold)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.(simile- myself as an average card in a poke hand)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.(personification-one note song)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.(winter of his years)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.(power of 3)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.(chides of a smile)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."(strutted-imagery)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.(imagery-breathing fire)
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.(simile- as white as the ice )
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.(parallel structure)
1. power of 3's. personification.
2. imagery. "painting a picture"
3. power of 3's. repetition.
4. imagery.
5. exaggeration. "painting a picture"
6. simile
7. simile. imagery
8. imagery.
9. imagery.
10. simile. imagery
11. imagery. personification
12. imagery. simile.
13. metaphor.
14. metaphor.
15. jumping right into the story.
16. metaphor
17. imagery.
18. metaphor. imagery.
19. "painting a picture". power of 3's
20. exaggeration. metaphor
21. imagery. sense of dichotomy.
22. power of 4's.
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
[She is acting as if her car is a person, Personification]
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
[ come after me with a pitchfork, imagery]
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
[critical older brother twice, repetition]
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
[melted, imagery]
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
[blindfolded]
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
[metaphor]
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
[Uncle Mark was LIKE a lion, simile]
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
[dodged death three times, imagery]
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
[longer I stayed, the darker I become, Metaphor]
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
[As bare as an elephant’s back, simile]
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
[last bit of courage slipped out, personification]
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. (love this, great metaphor!)
[average card in poker hand, but not unless, metaphor]
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
[one-note song, metaphor]
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
[he was in to the winter of his years, metaphor]
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
[]
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
[embrace, imagery; parallel structure]
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
[tormented, my cheeks starting to cramp up, imagery]
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
[shot through the door, strutted and demanded, imagery]
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
[]
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
[breathe fire, metaphor]
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
[White as the ice surrounding me, metaphor]
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
[ drools, sheds, barks, paradox-parallel construction(drools, sheds, barks)]
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
[She is acting as if her car is a person, Personification]
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
[ come after me with a pitchfork, imagery]
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
[critical older brother twice, repetition]
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
[melted, imagery]
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
[blindfolded]
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
[metaphor]
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
[Uncle Mark was LIKE a lion, simile]
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
[dodged death three times, imagery]
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
[longer I stayed, the darker I become, Metaphor]
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
[As bare as an elephant’s back, simile]
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
[last bit of courage slipped out, personification]
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. (love this, great metaphor!)
[average card in poker hand, but not unless, metaphor]
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
[one-note song, metaphor]
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
[he was in to the winter of his years, metaphor]
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
[]
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
[embrace, imagery; parallel structure]
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
[tormented, my cheeks starting to cramp up, imagery]
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
[shot through the door, strutted and demanded, imagery]
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
[]
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
[breathe fire, metaphor]
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
[White as the ice surrounding me, metaphor]
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
[ drools, sheds, barks, paradox-parallel construction(drools, sheds, barks)]
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
[She is acting as if her car is a person, Personification]
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
[ come after me with a pitchfork, imagery]
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
[critical older brother twice, repetition]
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
[melted, imagery]
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
[blindfolded]
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
[metaphor]
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
[Uncle Mark was LIKE a lion, simile]
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
[dodged death three times, imagery]
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
[longer I stayed, the darker I become, Metaphor]
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
[As bare as an elephant’s back, simile]
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
[last bit of courage slipped out, personification]
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. (love this, great metaphor!)
[average card in poker hand, but not unless, metaphor]
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
[one-note song, metaphor]
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
[he was in to the winter of his years, metaphor]
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
[]
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
[embrace, imagery; parallel structure]
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
[tormented, my cheeks starting to cramp up, imagery]
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
[shot through the door, strutted and demanded, imagery]
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
[]
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
[breathe fire, metaphor]
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
[White as the ice surrounding me, metaphor]
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
[ drools, sheds, barks, paradox-parallel construction(drools, sheds, barks)]
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
[She is acting as if her car is a person, Personification]
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
[ come after me with a pitchfork, imagery]
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
[critical older brother twice, repetition]
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
[melted, imagery]
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
[blindfolded]
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
[metaphor]
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
[Uncle Mark was LIKE a lion, simile]
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
[dodged death three times, imagery]
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
[longer I stayed, the darker I become, Metaphor]
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
[As bare as an elephant’s back, simile]
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
[last bit of courage slipped out, personification]
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. (love this, great metaphor!)
[average card in poker hand, but not unless, metaphor]
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
[one-note song, metaphor]
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
[he was in to the winter of his years, metaphor]
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
[]
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
[embrace, imagery; parallel structure]
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
[tormented, my cheeks starting to cramp up, imagery]
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
[shot through the door, strutted and demanded, imagery]
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
[]
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
[breathe fire, metaphor]
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
[White as the ice surrounding me, metaphor]
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
[ drools, sheds, barks, paradox-parallel construction(drools, sheds, barks)]
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
[She is acting as if her car is a person, Personification]
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
[ come after me with a pitchfork, imagery]
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
[critical older brother twice, repetition]
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
[melted, imagery]
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
[blindfolded]
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
[metaphor]
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
[Uncle Mark was LIKE a lion, simile]
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
[dodged death three times, imagery]
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
[longer I stayed, the darker I become, Metaphor]
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
[As bare as an elephant’s back, simile]
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
[last bit of courage slipped out, personification]
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. (love this, great metaphor!)
[average card in poker hand, but not unless, metaphor]
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
[one-note song, metaphor]
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
[he was in to the winter of his years, metaphor]
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
[]
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
[embrace, imagery; parallel structure]
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
[tormented, my cheeks starting to cramp up, imagery]
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
[shot through the door, strutted and demanded, imagery]
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
[]
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
[breathe fire, metaphor]
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
[White as the ice surrounding me, metaphor]
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
[ drools, sheds, barks, paradox-parallel construction(drools, sheds, barks)]
1. The car is being spoken about as a person. Personification
2. His emotions are exaggerated. Hyperbole
3. Critical older brother is restated to make a point. Parallel structure.
4. She didn’t actually melt. Hyperbole.
5. Exaggerated. Hyperbole.
6. Satire.
7. Comparing uncle to a caged animal. Simile.
8. Action verbs for emphasis.
9. Comparing length of the trip to skin tone. Simile.
10. Listing things missing from room. Parallel structure. Comparing walls to an elephant’s back. Simile.
11. Courage and feet depicted as people. Personification.
12. Comparing self to a poke hand. Metaphor.
13. Comparing self to a one note song. Metaphor.
14. Hyperbole. Metaphor.
15. Irony
16. Irony
17. Parallel structure.
18. Repetition of food to make a point. Parallel structure.
19. Can’t really breathe fire. Used to exaggerate emotion. Hyperbole.
20. “Her face white as ice”. Simile.
21. The imperfect animal is perfect. Irony. Repetition of animal’s habits. Parallel structure.
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
(Personification, giving a car human qualities)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
(Imagery, come after me with a pitchfork)
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
(Repetition, critical older brother)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(Imagery, melted into my mom)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(Imagery, navigate blindfolded)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(Imagery, possessed by Cupid)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
(Simile, like a lion in the zoo)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(Imagery, dodged death three times)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(Parallel structure, metaphor, comparing trip to skin tone)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
(Metaphor, walls as bare as an elephant’s back)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(Personification, courage slipped and ran)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
(Parallel structure, 3 phrases)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(Metaphor, comparing themselves to a one note song)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
()
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
(Parallel structure, 2 phrases)
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(Parallel structure, 3 phrases)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
()
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded, "Two tickets, please."
(Parallel structure, 3 phrases)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(Parallel structure, 4 phrases)
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
(Imagery, ready to breathe fire)
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
(Metaphor, white as the ice)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(Paradox, true phrases leading to a contradiction)
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
(Personification, giving a car human qualities)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
(Imagery, come after me with a pitchfork)
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
(Repetition, critical older brother)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(Imagery, melted into my mom)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(Imagery, navigate blindfolded)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(Imagery, possessed by Cupid)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
(Simile, like a lion in the zoo)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(Imagery, dodged death three times)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(Parallel structure, metaphor, comparing trip to skin tone)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
(Metaphor, walls as bare as an elephant’s back)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(Personification, courage slipped and ran)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
(Parallel structure, 3 phrases)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(Metaphor, comparing themselves to a one note song)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
()
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
(Parallel structure, 2 phrases)
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(Parallel structure, 3 phrases)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
()
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded, "Two tickets, please."
(Parallel structure, 3 phrases)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(Parallel structure, 4 phrases)
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
(Imagery, ready to breathe fire)
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
(Metaphor, white as the ice)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(Paradox, true phrases leading to a contradiction)
1. Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon. (This showing personification of Nancy calling her car her baby, pride, and joy)
2. I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork. (The red describes imagery)
3. He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother. (Keeps repeating itself with saying critical older brother)
4. When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her. (Red is example of imagery)
5. I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to. (Blindfolded shows how he/she could go to the orthopedics)
6. It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something. (Use possessed in the sentence)
7. Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital. (Red is a simile)
8. My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live. (Use of saying dodging death three times)
9. I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became. (Comparison of trip to skin tone)
10. There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back. (Red phrase is a metaphor)
11. As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow. (Courage is personification)
12. I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless. (Metaphor)
13. By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song. (Comparison of activities to a one-note song- Metaphor)
14. While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family. (Red phrase is metaphor)
15. Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents. (Directs compulsive liar directly in use to his parents)
16. I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am. (Parallel structure)
17. We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up. (Use of expression of tormented with chides)
18. I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please." (Parallel structure)
19. Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States. (Grease-filled hamburgers is use of imagery)
20. She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim. (Red phrase is imagery)
21. Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor. (Comparing face to white as the ice- Metaphor)
22. He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible. (Red phrase is a paradox)
Nancy is my pride and joy. She is my baby. She is my 2002 Neon.
( personification)
I was shocked at his reaction; his precognition was that he would come after me with a pitchfork.
(imagery)
He's taken up the roles of comedian, worldly traveler, tutor, conversational companion, critical older brother, pretty cool guy, topic of conversation for my friends and me, critical older brother, self assured genius, outspoken mentor, best friend, and seriously critical older brother.
(repetition, phrasing)
When I got back to my seat, I melted into my mom and wept with her.
(vocabulary, image)
I could navigate my way to orthopedics blindfolded if you asked me to.
(phrasing)
It was if he had been possessed by Cupid or something.
(phrasing)
Uncle Mark was like a lion in a zoo, only he was unwillingly caged in at Jefferson Hospital.
( metaphor, simile)
My grandfather had a lot of fight within him and dodged death three times when the doctors only gave him a couple of days to live.
(phrasing)
I later compared my trip to my skin tone. The longer I stayed, the darker I became, the more Panamanian I became.
(phrasing)
There was no clothing lying around, no computer to be seen, and the walls were as bare as an elephant's back.
( phrasing ,metaphor)
As I stepped over the threshold, the last bit of courage slipped out of the tips of my toes and ran back to the spot on the floor where I had been sitting; my feet wanted to follow.
(phrasing, personification)
I thought of myself as just an average card in a poke hand, nothing too special, but at the same time, not completely useless.
(metaphor)
By participating in these activities, I have realized that I am not just a one-note song.
(phrasing, metaphor)
While he was in to the winter of his years, he continues to insist that he could still provide for his entire family.
(phrasing, metaphor)
Hello. My name is xxxxxx, and I am a compulsive liar, when it comes to my parents.
(a truth among children)
I'm now proud of who I am, I embrace my flaws wholeheartedly and I have accepted myself for who I truly am.
(parallel structure)
We were tormented with chides of "smile" and "say cheese," my cheeks starting to cramp up.
(phrasing)
I literally shot through the door, strutted up to the counter, and demanded,"Two tickets, please."
(parallel structure)
Endless supplies of grease-filled pizza, hamburgers, soda, and fast food restaurant on every corner; it can be easy to forget that not everyone lives in this Utopia we call the United States.
(vocabulary)
She runs around yelling and critiquing, ready to breathe fire at her next unexpected victim.
( imagery )
Her face, which was a white as the ice surrounding me, greatly contradicted her peaceful demeanor.
( phrasing, metaphor)
He drools more than I thought physically possible, sheds more than I could have imagined, barks at TV shows he doesn't like, and is the most perfect animal possible.
(paradox)
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