Senior PURPLE class: Rage for Words
Your senior classmates have provided some sentences that show a mastery of the English language, maybe even a "rage for words." Take a close look at each sentence and tell me what rhetorical "trick" gives these words "life" beyond their mere literal meanings.What do I mean by a rhetorical trick?
Words come to life when they're arranged in figures of speech (metaphors, similes, paradoxes, oxymorons, personification, etc), images, sound patterns (alliteration, assonance), or rhetorical questions. Writing certain sentence patterns (parallel structure) add emphasis. Using crisp action verbs can kick-start a sentence.
The Greeks called this creation of powerful language "rhetoric." It was once a studied, practiced, and revered skill of the Greek citizenry. These days, the artful language and word gets a nasty reputation because rhetoric is usually associated with unctuous politicians or ambitious advertisers who are selling themselves or their products.
When we arrived in Chicago, we could breathe the music. [music is being compared to air, a metaphor] jtf schoolsville
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world.
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track.
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms.
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages ....
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer.
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in.
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two.
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own.
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots.
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face.
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes.
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity.
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall.
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on.
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end.
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur.
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom.
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes.
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary.
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him.
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret.
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family.
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world.
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering.
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As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world [ropes are being used to animate teaching his brother about the world].
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track [it is relating a life path to taking a detour on a road, methaphor].
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms [baby boy is being compared to an angel, a simile].
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages ....[textra breakfast is compared to loot, metaphor]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer.[power of listing]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in [repetitive pattern].
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two[ the bed beckons, personification].
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own[talks about piecing a guy together, metaphor].
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots[applause compared to gunshots, simile].
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face[words bouncing off of her like an iron suit, simile].
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes [tells about colors and very descriptive, imagery].
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity [weave together a sisterhood, personification].
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall [world being silent is compared to something being put on mute, metaphor].
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on.[mindset switched off, personification]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end.[ still as mannequin, simile. Pitter-patter, onomonpeia]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur.[weeks flooding and mind being pushed into rewind, personification].
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom.[panic like venom, simile]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes.[weeks flew by, personification]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary.[something people can relate to]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him.[questions being fired, personification]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret.[swimming in water being compared to regret, metaphor]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family.[ compares addiction to a wrecking ball, metaphor]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. [he pouts like a puppy, simile]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering.[athlete being cheered for versus the drummer boy cheering, sound pattern]
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [Show me the ropes of this weird new world, a metaphor]
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [Experience as a detour, a simile. Back on the right track comparing to a road, metaphor]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [Beautiful Baby Boy, alliteration. Radiating like an angel, simile]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages ....[sneakily slip some, alliteration]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [ new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories, parallel structure]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [ whole sentence is parallelism]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [ a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute, personification]
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [ pieced together, like a puzzle, metaphor]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [ applause like a thousand little gunshots. Simile]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face.[ metaphor, similie, personification, repetition, vivid description]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes.[ Vivid description]
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity.[ sisterhood compared to strings intertwining and weaving,
metaphor]
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [ Vivid description]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on.[ mindset compared to a light switch, metaphor]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [pitter-patter, alliteration and onomatopoeia. Shes compared as still as a mannequin, simile]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur.[her mind was compared to a cassette tape, metaphor]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [ panic compared to venom, simile]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [ Vivid description]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [ much more, alliteration]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [ Questions compared to gun shooting, metaphor]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [ Regret is compared to drowning, metaphor. Rage of words]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [ Vivid description. Ruining of family compared to wrecking ball, metaphor]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world.[ pouting is compared to puppy, simile]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [switch words}
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [Show me the ropes of this weird new world, a metaphor]
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [Experience as a detour, a simile. Back on the right track comparing to a road, metaphor]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [Beautiful Baby Boy, alliteration. Radiating like an angel, simile]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages ....[sneakily slip some, alliteration]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [ new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories, parallel structure]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [ whole sentence is parallelism]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [ a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute, personification]
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [ pieced together, like a puzzle, metaphor]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [ applause like a thousand little gunshots. Simile]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face.[ metaphor, similie, personification, repetition, vivid description]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes.[ Vivid description]
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity.[ sisterhood compared to strings intertwining and weaving,
metaphor]
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [ Vivid description]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on.[ mindset compared to a light switch, metaphor]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [pitter-patter, alliteration and onomatopoeia. Shes compared as still as a mannequin, simile]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur.[her mind was compared to a cassette tape, metaphor]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [ panic compared to venom, simile]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [ Vivid description]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [ much more, alliteration]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [ Questions compared to gun shooting, metaphor]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [ Regret is compared to drowning, metaphor. Rage of words]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [ Vivid description. Ruining of family compared to wrecking ball, metaphor]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world.[ pouting is compared to puppy, simile]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [switch words}
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [weird….world have the same first letter alliteration]
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [metaphor- compares an experience to a detour]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [alliteration- beautiful baby boy, simile- compares the baby to an angel]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages .... [alliteration- sneakily slip some, good word imagery]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [repetition- power of threes]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [parallel structure]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [alliteration- bed…beckoned, personification]
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [alliteration-pieced…perfect]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [simile- like a thousand little gunshots]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face. [repetition- every, alliteration- song sung and funeral felt, personification- song can’t bounce, simile- as if I was wearing an iron suit]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. [metaphor- cars and trees blend into disfigured images, good imagery]
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. [metaphor- compares relationship to strings]
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [simile- it was like the whole rest of the world was on mute]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. [parallel structure- switched off and on]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [simile- compares stillness to a mannequin, alliteration- pitter patter]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. [good word imagery, metaphor- compares a thought to a flood]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [simile- compares panic to venom]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [good word imagery]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [alliteration- much more]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [good word choice- bombardment]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [metaphor- for feeling a lot of regret]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [metaphor- compares addiction to a wrecking ball]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. [alliteration- putt…pouts…puppy]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [parallel structure]
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. (weird and world have the same first letter, alliteration)
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. (compares experience to a detour, metaphor)
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. (radiating like an angel, simile) (beautiful baby boy, alliteration)
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages .... (sneakily slip some, alliteration)
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. (repitition of the word new)
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. (parallel structure)
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. (bed and beckoned, alliteration)
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. (pieced, perfect, alliteration)
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. (applause like a thousand little gunshots, simile)
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face. (repetition of the word every) (song bounced, personification) (as if I was wearing an iron suit, simile)
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. (curled fingers into white knuckled fists and cars and trees blend into disfigured images, imagery)
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. (compares a sisterhood with intertwined strings, metaphor)
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. (the world being mute, simile)
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. (parallel structure)
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. (as still as a mannequin, simile) (pitter-patter, alliteration)
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. (compares her thoughts to a flood, metaphor)
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. (compares panic with venom, simile)
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. (flew by, image)
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. (my, much, more, alliteration)
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. (fired at him, image and crisp verb)
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. (swimming up to my neck in regret, image)
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. (compares addiction to wrecking ball, metaphor)
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. (compares a reaction to a four-putt to pouting like a puppy, simile)
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. (parallel structure)
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [weird and world have the same first letter alliteration]
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [compares an experience to a detour, metaphor]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [radiating like an angel, simile] [beautiful baby boy, alliteration]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages. [sneakily slip some, alliteration]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [new work projects, new objects, and new memories; listing of words, repetition]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [parallel structure]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [bed that beckoned; good word imagery and alliteration, personification]
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [pieced..perfect, alliteration]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [applause like a thousand little gunshots, simile]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face. [every word..every favorite, repetition] [song bounced, personification] [compares them to wearing an iron suit, simile]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. [curled fingers into white knuckled fists and cars and trees blend into disfigured images, imagery
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. [compares relationship to strings, metaphor]
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [world being mute, simile]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. [parallel structure]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [compares them to be as still as a mannequin, simile] [pitter-patter, alliteration]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. [compares thoughts to a flood, metaphor]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [panic spreading like venom, simile]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [good word imagery]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [much more, alliteration]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [good word choice]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [good word image]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [compares addiction to a wrecking ball, metaphor]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. [pouts like a puppy, simile] [putt..pout, alliteration]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [parallel structure]
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As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [weird…world have the same first letter-alliteration]
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [compares an experience to a detour-metaphor]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [beautiful baby boy-alliteration, compares the baby to an angel-simile]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages .... [sneakily slip some-alliteration, good word imagery]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [power of three’s-repetition]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [parallel structure]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [bed…beckoned-alliteration, personification of the bed]
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [pieced…perfect-alliteration]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [compares applause to gun shots-simile]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if it bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face. [every word… every favorite song-repetition, song bounced-personification, compares herself to wearing an iron suit-similie]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. [curled fingers to white knuckles and cars and trees blend into disfigured images-good imagery]
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. [compares relationship to strings –metaphor]
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [says the world is mute-simile]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. [switched off…switched on-parallel structure]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [compares stillness to a mannequin-similie, pitter-patter alliteration]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. [compares a thoughts to flood-metaphor]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [compares panic spreading to venom-simile]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [good word imagery]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [much more-alliteration]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [bombardment, every question fired at him-good word choice
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [metaphor for feeling a lot of regret]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [compares addiction to a wrecking ball-metaphor]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. [putt…pouts…puppy-alliteration]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [parallel structure]
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world.
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [Life is being compared to a road, a metaphor]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [The baby boy is being compared to an angel, a simile]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages . [food is being called loot, a metaphor]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [Repetition of the word new]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. {personification of his clumsiness]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [the bed is beckoning, personification]
It was as if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [comparing a perfect person to a puzzle, a metaphor]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [compares applause to gunshots, a simile]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face.[song sung, alliteration][funeral felt, alliteration]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. [compares cars and trees to disfigured images, a metaphor]
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. [compares sisterhood to a blanket, a metaphor]
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [compares the world to a TV on mute, a metaphor]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. [compares mindset to lights being switched on and off, a metaphor]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [pitter-patter, alliteration][compares a girl to a mannequin, a simile]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. [the mind was pushed, personification][ mind is compared to a tape, a metaphor]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [panic is compared to venom, a metaphor][panic spread, personification]
[to be continued]
When we arrived in Chicago, we could breathe the music. [music is being compared to air, a metaphor] jtf schoolsville
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [Ropes are being compared to the ways of life, metaphor]
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [Comparing an experience to a detour or different way around something, simile]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [Baby is being compared to the pureness of an angel, simile]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages .... [ Sneakly slip adds emphasis on what they were doing, alliteration]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [ Power of threes, the word new at the beginning of each part]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [ Faithful clumsiness usually doesn’t go together, oxymoron]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [ Bed cannot beckon, personification]
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [weird world is an alliteration]
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [it is a metaphor comparing their life to a road]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [beautiful baby boy, alliteration. Comparing baby to an angel]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages .... [sneakily slip some, alliteration]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [listing power of three]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [parallel structure]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [bed beckoned, alliteration and personification]
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [pieced perfect, alliteration]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [like a thousand little gunshots, simile]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face. [repetition of every, song sung and funeral felt, alliterations. As if I was wearing an iron suit, simile]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. [cars and trees blend into disfigured images, metaphor]
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. [
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [it was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, simile]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. [switch on and off, parallel structure]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [still as a mannequin, simile. Pitter patter, alliteration]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. [good word imagery, thoughts compared to a flood, metaphor]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [panic spread like venom, simile]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [good word imagery]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [much more, alliteration]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [every question fired at him, questions are like weapons being fired]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret, simile]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [addiction compared to wrecking ball, metaphor]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. [pouts puppy, alliteration]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [parallel structure]
When we arrived in Chicago, we could breathe the music. [music is being compared to air, a metaphor] jtf schoolsville
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world.(the rope are compared to the new world, metaphor.)
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. (Experience is compared to a detour, simile. Get my life back on track, metaphor.)
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. (Beautiful baby boy is alliteration. Radiating boy is being compared to an angel, simile.)
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages ....(sneakily slip, alliteration)
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer.( power of listing)
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in.( First year, and second year, parallelism, parallel structure)
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two.( bed that beckoned me to stay, personification)
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own.(pieced together the perfect guy, metaphor)
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots.(like a thousand gunshots, simile)
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face.( vivid description, as if I was wearing an iron suit, simile)
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes.(fingers curled into white knuckled fists, watching the cars and trees blend, Vivid description
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity.(sisterhood compared to strings and they were weaved, matephor)
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall.( Vivid description)
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on.( mindset was compared to a switch, metaphor)
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end.( pitter patter, onomatopoeia, standing still as a mannequin, simile)
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur.( mind compared to vcr, metaphor, flooding back to me in a blur, vivid description)
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom.( panic spread like venom, simile)
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes.( weeks flew by, personification, vivid description)
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary.(alliteration much more,)
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him.( every question fired at him, comparing questions to bullets, metaphor)
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret.( swimming up to my neck in regret, compared internal struggle to drowning, metaphor)
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family.( wrecking ball, metaphor)
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world.( pouts like a puppy, alliteration, like on a golf course a four putt, simile)
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering.
When we arrived in Chicago, we could breathe the music. [music is being compared to air, a metaphor] jtf schoolsville
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world.(the rope are compared to the new world, metaphor.)
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. (Experience is compared to a detour, simile. Get my life back on track, metaphor.)
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. (Beautiful baby boy is alliteration. Radiating boy is being compared to an angel, simile.)
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages ....(sneakily slip, alliteration)
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer.( power of listing)
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in.( First year, and second year, parallelism, parallel structure)
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two.( bed that beckoned me to stay, personification)
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own.(pieced together the perfect guy, metaphor)
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots.(like a thousand gunshots, simile)
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face.( vivid description, as if I was wearing an iron suit, simile)
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes.(fingers curled into white knuckled fists, watching the cars and trees blend, Vivid description
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity.(sisterhood compared to strings and they were weaved, matephor)
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall.( Vivid description)
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on.( mindset was compared to a switch, metaphor)
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end.( pitter patter, onomatopoeia, standing still as a mannequin, simile)
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur.( mind compared to vcr, metaphor, flooding back to me in a blur, vivid description)
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom.( panic spread like venom, simile)
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes.( weeks flew by, personification, vivid description)
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary.(alliteration much more,)
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him.( every question fired at him, comparing questions to bullets, metaphor)
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret.( swimming up to my neck in regret, compared internal struggle to drowning, metaphor)
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family.( wrecking ball, metaphor)
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world.( pouts like a puppy, alliteration, bad golf are compared to a pouting puppy , simile)
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering.(parallel structure)
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [the weeks flew, personification]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [much more, alliteration]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. {compares questions to a bombardment, a metaphor][question fired, personification]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [compares being inside to being stuck in a cell, a metaphor][swimming in regret, personification]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [addiction is compared to a wrecking ball, a metaphor]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. [the boy pouts like a puppy, a simile][compares on time to another, a simile]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [parallel structure]
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [ropes are used to represent the guidelines and rules of life – metaphor]
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [experience as a detour is a simile because it uses the word as]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [radiating like an angel is a simile because it uses the word as]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages .... [sneakily slip uses alliteration and loot refers to treasure]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [uses listing in sentence structure by saying the word new repeatedly]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [metaphor]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [bed that beckoned uses personification]
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [relating a guy to a puzzle – metaphor]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [applause like a thousand little gunshots is a simile because it uses the word like]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face. [as if I was wearing an iron suit is a simile]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. [the vivid description of the fists, window, cars, and trees use imagery]
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. [metaphor]
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [pestering clock is a personification]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. [flashing red and blue lights use imagery]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [standing as still as a mannequin is a simile, pitter-patter is an onomatopoeia]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. [relating a mind to a movie – metaphor]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [panic spread like venom is a simile because it uses the word like]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [imagery]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [cliché]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [questions being fired is personification]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [swimming up to my neck uses personification, metaphor]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [addiction was a wrecking ball - metaphor]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. [pouts like a puppy is a simile and uses alliteration]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [sentence structure]
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [Metaphor- the experiences facing to ropes;idiomatic expression.
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [Conceit- comparing his entire life to a track, and the one experience to a detour
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [Vivid word: radiating. Simile: “like an angel”
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot included bread and Nutella packages [Alliteration- “sneakily slip”
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [Listing power, the strongest of the three (new memories…) is listed last
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [Listing power: clumsiness doing them in is more important than amber shoving them jokingly.
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [Personification: “the bed beckoned”
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [Metaphor: the guy to a puzzle/something materialistic/ too perfect to be living
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [Simile: comparing the explosive applause to gunshots
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if it bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face. [Simile: comparing the attitude at the funeral to wearing a metal suit. Personification: giving the words a person characteristic in having them “bounce”
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. [imagery: describing the trees blending and the white knuckles
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. [Metaphor: comparing the sisterhood to something that can be sewn/weaved together
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [Simile: Comparing the silence to the world being on mute. Rich word choice in “pestering clock on the wall”
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. [Imagery: you can picture the red and blue lights flashing
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [Onomatopoeia: pitter patter. Simile: Standing as still as a mannequin.
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. [Good word choice: instead of saying “thinking back” they said “pushed into rewind mode” and instead of coming back they said “flooding back in a blur.”
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom [Simile: “spread like venom.”
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [ Metaphorically comparing the days passing by to days being crossed out on a calendar
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [Hinting at something that happened that is going to make it extraordinary
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [Metaphorically comparing the questions to a bombardment
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [Figuratively giving regret the characteristics that allow you to swim in it. Metaphor: comparingwhere they were to a cell
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [Metaphorically comparing addiction to a wrecking ball
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world.[Simile and Alliteration: pouts like a puppy
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [uses “ropes” in a non-literal way]
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [uses his experience as a metaphor of a doctor]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [uses imagery, “radiating”]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages .... [“sneakily slip some” is used as alliteration]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [uses the sound patterns of three]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [this sentence uses crisp action words to attract the readers interest]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two.
[uses personification, “a bed that beckoned for me to stay”]
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [using a metaphor, compares a guy to a puzzle]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [uses simile between applause and gunshots]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face. [uses a metaphor, as if she was wearing an iron suit]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. [uses imagery to draw a picture in the reader’s head]
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. [uses a metaphor to compare sisterhood to a blanket]
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [uses a metaphor, compares the world to a TV]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. [uses a metaphor, compares his mindset to a light switch]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [uses onomatopoeia, “pitter-patter”]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. [uses metaphor compares mind to a remote using rewind]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [uses simile, “panic spread like venom”]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [uses images of a calendar]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary. [uses good structure of words to grab the reader’s attention]
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [uses good structure of words to grab the reader’s attention]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [metaphor, compares water to regret]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [uses metaphor, compares addiction to a wrecking ball]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. [uses imagery to paint a picture for the reader]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [uses good structure of words to grab the readers attention]
When we arrived in Chicago, we could breathe the music. [music is being compared to air, a metaphor] jtf schoolsville
As soon as I was old enough, my older brother was there to show me the ropes of this weird new world. [show me the ropes: comparing
I like to look at this experience as a detour in my life, and I just needed some help getting back on the right track. [detour –metaphor]
She guides me into Chelsea's room, and the first thing I see is a beautiful baby boy radiating like an angel in his mother's protective arms. [like an angel- simile]
We would sneakily slip some extra food from the breakfast table. Our normal loot include bread and Nutella packages .... [sneakily slipped- alliteration]
Each year brought new work projects, new obstacles, and new memories to make this an even more unforgettable summer. [power of listing]
The first year, Amber shoved me jokingly, and the second year, my faithful clumsiness did me in. [faithful clumsiness-oxymoron]
I rose from a bed that beckoned for me to stay for just another minute or two. [the bed beckoning is personification]
It was if I had pieced together the perfect guy on my own. [pieced creative verb choice]
Once I have hit my final pose, I hear an explosion of applause like a thousand little gunshots. [like a thousand little guns- simile]
Every word said, every favorite song sung during the funeral felt as if if bounced off of me, as if I was wearing an iron suit, protecting me from the truth I did not want to face. [good verb choice. Iron suit- good word choice]
My fingers curled into white-knuckled fists as I stared out the tinted window of my parent's SUV, watching the cars and trees blend into disfigured images before my eyes. [vivid description]
We have been able to weave together a sisterhood with the strings intertwined for eternity. [strings is a metaphor for sisterhood]
It was like the whole rest of the world was on mute, except for that pestering clock up on the wall. [world is being compared to a tv-metaphor]
This whole carefree mindset was switched off the moment those flashing red and blue lights switched on. [switched off-switched on]
She paused for a brief moment, standing as still as a mannequin, waiting for the pitter-patter of Alicia's feet to end. [as still as a mannequin-simile]
As we sat down, my mind was pushed into rewind mode and the past few weeks came flooding back to me in a blur. [rewind mode mind being compared to a tv]
When I had looked for several minutes and found no sign of her, panic spread like venom. [like venom- simile]
The weeks of the trip flew by. I could almost see the days on the calendar being crossed out right before my eyes. [“days on the calender being crossed out”]
I had never really considered my life much more than ordinary.
Kevin had become accustomed to the bombardment and casually answered every question fired at him. [bombardment and fired- relating this to war]
I watched cars and people outside living their everyday lives, as I was in a cell swimming up to my neck in regret. [swimming- good word choice]
I wished I didn't know addiction, the wrecking ball that ruined my family. [wreeking ball is a metaphor for addiction]
But other times, like on the golf course after a four-putt, he pouts like a puppy and disappears from the rest of the world. [like a puppy-simile]
I decided that what I really wanted was to be the athlete who was cheered for and not the drummer boy cheering. [repetition of cheering]
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