February 25 Lab Day for Sophomores--Yellow Section
Comment on three of the better responses, specifically explaining why you liked each of the three in a few sentences (3-5 each).
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POV Pieces That I Liked
Kelley Kempski- This piece shows the simple thinking of a child, Phoebe, and also seems very different from the way Holden speaks. Phoebe is a much more optimist person, as most kids should be. I also liked it because it seemed real. Phoebe acted like a child, mature, but still had certain childlike characteristics. For example, she was looking for Holden to be proud of her, and that excited her.
Michael Gonzalez- I really liked this piece. For one, it was another Phoebe point of view, who is my favorite character. But what really hooked me was the end of it. All the way at the bottom, it was signed --Phoebe Weatherfield Caulfield. This showed her personality very well, and it was one thing that made this piece stand out.
Samantha Kasehagan- I enjoyed this one very much. It was in Sally Hayes point of view. This writing piece showed that Sally was feminine and sure did know how to manipulate men. Despite how phony Caulfield thinks she is, this piece shows that Sally may actually mean it. Reading from other point of views is interesting because it gives us an escape from how Holden presented information to us. Reading from Sally's point of view gives us a whole new presentation style and perspective.
Justin Engelmann- I liked his because it a more realistic view on how Phoebe might have reacted to Holden coming home. Justin displayed the excitement that he was home and the disappointment that he got kicked out. I thought this scene is more interesting from her point of view. It is a better view of her emotions.
Kenan Megahed- I like his because it shows how the world might view Holden as an unappreciative delinquent. It shows how the professor might have felt on the inside. He use of quotes and description of Holden was very good.
Regine Choi- As expected, Regine's point of view for this seen worked very well. She showed how Phoebe most likely felt, and her thought process through out the conversation. It showed a different personality of Phoebe that i didn't imagine before. The only fault was Phoebe was spelled wrong once,
1. I liked Kelley Kempski’s story from the perspective of Pheobe Caulfield. I enjoyed her writing because she really sounded like a little girl. I felt like it was really Pheobe talking. She stuck to the story while adding to it and making it interesting.
2. I enjoyed Caitlin Mannering’s story because she sounded how I imagined Pheobe talking. I liked how she talked about Pheobe’s dream in the beginning. She made the story very interesting.
3. I enjoyed Andrea Ludman’s story from Jane Gallagher’s viewpoint. I thought it was interesting to hear from Jane Gallagher because it was unexpected. I really enjoyed her writing.
1. I liked Alexa Murray’s point of view as Phoebe. I found it very interesting how she wrote about Phoebe packing up her bags and going to meet Holden at the museum. In the novel, we are left to infer what Phoebe’s thought process was; however, Alexa’s writing gives us more insight into Phoebe’s mind. The style and word choice seemed to be very accurate with the mind of a fourth grade, which I liked. Her writing allowed me to get a good view of the story from Phoebe’s mind, especially, how Phoebe felt about Holden leaving.
2. I also liked Nicholas Carter’s writing from the view point of Ackley. Holden told us a lot about his feelings toward Ackley and Stradlater, but we never heard how they felt about Holden. From the view point of Ackley, I was able to see how Ackley felt about Holden and how truly annoying Holden also was. After reading this writing, I was a little more sympathetic to Ackley and the position he was in in the novel. No one likes a rude, arrogant, and conceited person, especially when they are younger than you.
3. A third writing I enjoyed was Allie’s from the view point of Mr. Antolini. When reading this section in the novel, I was conflicted over whether Mr. Antolini was a friend or pedophile. After reading Allie’s writing, I have a new insight into the mind of Mr. Antolini that night. Maybe it was just a foolish mistake which is a lot better than what one might have been led to believe. I enjoyed how this writing from Mr. Antolini’s point of view could have changed the way one read the rest of the novel and, if Holden had known, the outcome of the story.
Andrea: I think this post was very creative because it was hardly in the book and Jane was never actually introduced as a character so we don’t really know her very well. Even though it was probably a tough scene to create, I think Andrea did a really good job. The fact that Jane was just too scared to tell Holden how she felt about him is so realistic. It was also very sweet and touching written from Jane’s perspective.
Caitlin: A lot of people chose to do this scene from Phoebe’s perspective, but what set Caitlin’s apart for me was the fact that she didn’t include a lot of dialogue; she added more of what Phoebe was actually thinking. I also like how Caitlin created the dream that Phoebe was having and described it. She also used vocabulary and talked in a way that I could believe it was coming from a little girl.
Michael: I really like how he made the character sound so young. I could tell that she was little and was upset about Holden’s leaving. I also like that we did the same scene. It’s interesting to read the same scene with someone else’s spin on it. He did a really good job without dragging it out too much.
I liked Justin Engelman's blog for a few reasons. One is that he did a good job with the dialogue because it felt like it was part of the book. He also did a good job speaking from the point of view Phoebe. The way portrayed Phoebe is exactly how I would have.
I liked Kelly Kempski's blog because she made the dialogue between Phoebe and HOlden flow really well. Also she made it seem like it was part of the book. Finally she came up with some very creative topics in her blog.
I really enjoyed Andrea Ludman's blog because of many things. One is it was a very sweet/nice blog. She portrayed Jane exactly how i would have. She portrayed her as a sweet innocent girl which is what i pictured as. Finally she made the seen very believable.
I liked Justin Engelman's blog for a few reasons. One is that he did a good job with the dialogue because it felt like it was part of the book. He also did a good job speaking from the point of view Phoebe. The way portrayed Phoebe is exactly how I would have.
I liked Kelly Kempski's blog because she made the dialogue between Phoebe and HOlden flow really well. Also she made it seem like it was part of the book. Finally she came up with some very creative topics in her blog.
I really enjoyed Andrea Ludman's blog because of many things. One is it was a very sweet/nice blog. She portrayed Jane exactly how i would have. She portrayed her as a sweet innocent girl which is what i pictured as. Finally she made the seen very believable.
I enjoyed Dan’s scene from Stradlater’s point of view on his date with Jane. I like how it showed that Stradlater does not care about Jane as much as Holden does. It says how Stradlater really just had a boring date with Jane that did not mean a lot to him. I like how it also explained how Stradlater was not hiding anything from Holden; he just didn’t want to answer personal questions that are none of Holden’s business.
I liked Todd’s scene from Carl Luce’s point of view on his conversation with Holden. He explained how Carl Luce really did not want to talk to Holden, but he was a nice guy and reluctantly agreed to meet him. It says how Carl was annoyed from all the questions he was being asked, and how he just wanted to have a normal conversation. I liked how it showed that Carl had moved on and grown up from the last time Holden knew him, while Holden was still a fairly immature teenager.
I liked Gabi’s scene about Sally’s date with Holden from her point of view. It showed how Sally really likes spending time with Holden and hanging out with him. It explains how she was having a lot more fun than Holden during the show and talking with her other friend. Sally was then very offended by what Holden was saying and how he was laughing. I liked how it showed Sally trying to reason with Holden, but then she got so mad she thought about never wanting to see him again.
1. I enjoyed Kelley Kempski’s response, from the point of view of Phoebe during Holden’s visit. I think she captured Phoebe’s personality spot-on and was in character for the whole story. I also loved how she took the details from the book and turned them around to Phoebe’s point of view, like Holden’s annoyance and sadness.
2. I also loved Caitlin Mannering’s response, also from the point of view of Phoebe. I like how she added more information while still keeping to the book’s details. She also stayed in character for the duration of the writing and captured Phoebe’s personality perfectly.
3. Andrea Ludman’s story from the point of view of Jane Gallagher was also very touching. It was uniquely written and was just as I imagined Jane to be. I loved the details she added about Jane and her thoughts about Holden.
One of the blogs that I liked was Alexa's response from the point of view of Phoebe when she got Holden's note at school. Alexa did a great job of incorporating dialogue and Phoebe's feelings into the story. I also loved the extra comedy that she added when the teacher caught Phoebe not paying attention. Lastly, she was very descriptive with the way she wrote Phoebe's actions by avoiding overused words.
A second response that I liked was Chris Blackwell's view of the train scene as Mrs. Morrow. Like Alexa's response, I liked the dialogue that Chris used and his incorporation of feelings. I could really tell that Mrs. Morrow was eager to learn about her son from the way that he wrote his response. It was easy to see how much of a "helicopter" parent Mrs. Morrow was in Chris's response.
Lastly, I thought that Allan's response was great. Like the other two, he incorporated dialogue and the narrator's feelings. He also provided a small backstory on why Maurice offered a prostitute for Holden. There was a bit of irony when Allan wrote about Maurice thinking "Like hell he is" since Sunny the prostitute says "Like fun you are" as a response to Holden's answer to the same age question later in the story. Holden predicted Sunny would probably say what Maurice thought.
I enjoyed Nick Carter’s writing that he told from Ackley’s point of view. We learn about Ackley in the beginning of the book, but we don’t really know how he feels. I think that the way the Nick wrote about Ackley is a very accurate description of how Ackley really was. As much as Ackley annoyed Holden, I think Holden annoyed Ackley in the same way. I think that this writing sounded like it could have come straight out of the text.
I thought that Dan Campbell’s writing about Stradlater’s date with Jane Gallagher was very good and creative. He wrote using Stradlater’s point of view. The way Stradlater is perceived through this writing is very nonchalant. The way he describes the date also seems like what would have happened.
I liked Andrea Ludman’s telling of the afternoon Holden and Jane spent together. I liked the way she told it from Jane’s point of view. I really enjoyed how she talked about how much Jane loved Holden and it made me wonder what could have happened if Holden and Jane ever met up again. Her writing was so descriptive and made me want to know what was going to happen next.
1.) Nick - Ackley
I liked reading Nick’s interpretation of how Ackley would think and react to the scene which he wrote about. I liked the way Nick used the word “pissed” with Ackley’s thoughts; it made it seem like I was in Ackley’s mind, listening to how Holden pisses him off and how he thinks that Holden acts so superior. I also liked how Nick included Ackley’s thoughts about clipping is toenails and hygiene. Overall, I enjoyed Nick’s use of vocabulary and the way he presented Ackley’s thoughts.
2.) Dan – Stradlater
I enjoyed reading Dan’s version of Stradlater’s date with Jane and how Stradlater reacted to Holden’s questioning. I like how Dan made Stradlater kind of innocent during this scene, because Dan’s version of Stradlater’s date had Stradlater and Jane doing normal things that a couple would do on a date, rather than what Holden suspected they did. I also liked Stradlater’s reaction to Holden’s questioning about the date; Stradlater thought Holden was a psychopath and that none of the date was his business. I enjoyed Dan’s version of Stradlater’s date with Jane mostly because of Stradlater’s reaction to Holden and his innocence during the date with Jane.
3.) Alexa – Phoebe
I liked Alexa’s interpretation of how Phoebe received Holden’s letter for various reasons. First, I liked the overall scene of Phoebe getting the letter; I liked how Phoebe was lost in thought thinking about how she wanted to run away with Holden no matter what Holden’s answer was. Second, I liked Phoebe’s thoughts about Holden’s reactions, saying he a had “real dumb look on his face” and all. The presentation of Phoebe’s thoughts was very well-written by Alexa.
Three point of view blogs that I really enjoyed were Andrea’s, Katie’s, and Allan’s. Andrea wrote from Jane Gallagher’s point of view which is really interesting because we never get to meet Jane in the novel. The blog she wrote was so adorable! It described the innocent relationship of Holden and Jane. The last line is heartbreaking because Jane says, “I love him more than he will ever know…maybe I should tell him.” This is so sad because Holden never found out that Jane loved him. Katie wrote from Sally Hayes’s point of view. She channeled Sally exactly as I had imagined her. She was condescending and stuck-up. She only cared about superficial details, like the “darling” skating skirts and Holden’s haircut. Allan wrote from Maurice’s point of view. This was an interesting character to choose since Maurice is such a minor character. However, Allan described Maurice exactly as I had imagined him. He was only concerned with how much money he was getting, even if that meant stealing the innocence of two teenagers.
One of the different point of view blogs I particularly liked was Katie Lee’s. She wrote about Holden’s date with Sally Hayes from her point of view. She wrote about things that, I think, Sally Hayes would have actually thought and still was consistent with the events in the story. Also, she made me want to keep reading even though I already knew what would happen.
Another blog I liked was Todd Psenicska’s. I think his is very original because not many people would have chosen to write from Carl Luce’s perspective especially because not as much is known about his character compared to many others. He didn’t just use dialogue from the book; he also incorporated thoughts about everything Holden said.
I also liked Andrea Ludman’s blog. She wrote it from Jane Gallagher’s perspective when she and Holden were younger. She wrote it in a way that a younger girl would write her thoughts-getting sidetracked and jumping from one event to another. It was also very originally because these events were told in Holden’s flashback in the book, so she had to tie it all together, and I think she did a good job of that.
The very first blogs I read was Nick Carter’s, it stood out because it was in good old Ackley’s point of view. There weren’t too many in Ackley’s point of view, so it was interesting to read. His convinced me that Ackley was a kid with festering pimples and a grouchy personality. Ackley doesn’t seem like a bad kid, he’s just annoyed with everything and everyone. And seems to annoy everyone around him. Another one of my favorites was Andrea’s blog. She did hers from Jane’s point of view, which I loved! Jane seems like such a genuinely sweet, nice girl and Andrea hit that spot on. I could really tell that Jane enjoyed Holden from Andrea’s writing. It was nice because there was no scene in the book of Jane and Holden meeting up in New York. So I enjoyed reading more about Jane. Lastly Alexa Murray’s blog was great. She wrote from Phoebe’s point of view, Phoebe is my favorite character. It was great how she did the whole kindergarten scene. I could picture the wheels in Phoebe’s head spinning as she devised her plan to go home during lunch. Alexa made the scene very realistic, I love how she put in how witty Phoebe really is.
I enjoyed reading Dan’s journal about Stradlater and Holden discussing Jane Gallagher from Stradlater’s point of view. Dan’s journal exemplifies Stradlater as the self-centered, “secret slob” that he is. The part in Dan’s blog when they are waiting for food shows how Stradlater does seem to think of himself as superior. I agree with Dan’s interpretation of Holden as a psychopath from Stradlater’s point of view.
Another journal that interested me was Nick’s journal from Ackley’s point of view when he visits Holden in his dorm room. I liked how Nick showed that Ackley does get annoyed when the younger kids, like Holden, call him “Ackley kid” or tell him what to do even though he is older. The way Ackley realizes that Holden is ignoring him when he enters Holden’s room. Ackley’s unique personality is revealed in Nick’s blog.
I also found Alexa’s journal creative. Alexa wrote from Phoebe’s point of view when Holden meets his little sister outside of the museum, but she described when Phoebe received the note from Holden in school, which wasn’t in the book. The scene Alexa created gives the reader insight to Phoebe’s personality and how she is a child, but is very intelligent. Alexa also shows how Phoebe loves her brother very much, but almost acts as a mentor to Holden. I don’t know if Alexa meant to do this, but I thought it was interesting how the teacher asked a question about Native Americans who are also in the museum where Holden is waiting for Phoebe.
I liked Annie’s writing for a couple of reasons. Annie wrote from Phoebe’s point of view. One thing I loved about her excerpt is the fact that the writing is very innocent and kind. To me this fit the character of Phoebe perfectly. Also, I enjoyed her use of words when Phoebe was leaving the school building, using phrases like “I ventured out into the hallway among the sea of people.” To me that really painted a picture.
I thought Andrea’s writing was also very nice. Something that really stood out from the others was how pensive the passage was. Even though many people’s writings were thoughts of the characters’, Andrea’s was more wistful in a way. It was more natural, and how a real human thinks; just thought after thought with no filter to delete the non-important statements. When I read this passage, I felt as though I was inside Jane Gallagher’s inner soul.
I enjoyed reading Todd’s passage for one main reason: it was realistic. This is probably what Luce was thinking during the entire conversation with Holden. I also enjoyed how he portrayed Luce as a brutally honest type of guy. He was someone who didn’t tip toe around the bush, but instead said what he was thinking, and didn’t care who thought what of him. Although these thoughts were in his mind, I have no doubt that he would have said them to someone if he really wanted to.
I liked Andrea L’s story. The reason that I like it is because it is something different than the Phoebe Caulfield deluge that has infiltrated this particular blog. I liked how it showed the mature version of Jane Gallagher. I simply thought that this approach on a growing and unsure Jane was refreshing.
I also liked Samantha K’s rendition. It’s always nice to see something other than Phoebe Caulfield. It’s interesting to see a story from a very minor character from the book, and I liked the airy presentation. I liked how she gave opinions that are opposite of Holden’s. I thought that that was spot on.
I liked Chris B’s version of the story from Ernest Morrow’s mother. Again, it was not a Phoebe Caulfield story. I liked how it was clear and concise. I also liked the fact that it kept to the conversation that Holden had with Mrs. Morrow.
I liked Nick Carter's point of view of Ackley. He fit the role well and used a lot of digressions. He tied the disorganized style of The Catcher in the Rye very well into the POV of Ackley.
I liked Kelley's point of view. Her dialogue of Holden and Phoebe was very in depth and realistic. She also also used good vernacular that could expected from two kids living back then.
I liked Hannah's POV of Stradlater. A teenage jock, such as Stradlater, could be expected forgetting girls' names and checking out other girls.The vernacular was also fairly accurate.
Regine: I liked her essay because I thought she stuck to Phoebe's character well. She didn't make many mistakes, in fact, she only misspelled anything once. Also,I liked how well she stuck to the storyline.
Justin:I liked how Justin stuck with Holden's way of speaking, with all of its improper grammar. That is part of the characters, which I felt he also stuck with well. I also think it was written well overall.
Chris B:I like how his essay was longer than most, showing he put a lot of effort into it.It also shows how Holden's lies are so believable to others. It also, in a way, shows how prestigious of a school Pencey Prep is.
I enjoyed Kelley’s entry because it really sounded like something that a little girl like Phoebe would have written. There wasn’t very advanced vocabulary or anything and the sentences were simple and brief. I also thought that the way the word “real” was used, such as in “I want him to see me in it real bad” also made it sound like how a little child would talk.
I also enjoyed Chris Blackwell’s entry written in the point of view of Ernest Morrow’s mother. I found it interesting because well Holden’s tells that story, he talks about how he was completely lying because all mothers want to hear about is “what a hot-shot their son is.” The way it was explained in the entry, it really seemed like Ernest’s mother wanted to hear everything about her son and believed Holden when he told her.
I enjoyed Sam’s entry written from the point of view of Sally Hayes. It was written how I had imagined Sally would have talked, using words like “marvelous” a lot. I also thought it seemed realistic how Sally kept praising the Lunts and how great actors they were.
I enjoyed Kelley’s entry because it really sounded like something that a little girl like Phoebe would have written. There wasn’t very advanced vocabulary or anything and the sentences were simple and brief. I also thought that the way the word “real” was used, such as in “I want him to see me in it real bad” also made it sound like how a little child would talk.
I also enjoyed Chris Blackwell’s entry written in the point of view of Ernest Morrow’s mother. I found it interesting because well Holden’s tells that story, he talks about how he was completely lying because all mothers want to hear about is “what a hot-shot their son is.” The way it was explained in the entry, it really seemed like Ernest’s mother wanted to hear everything about her son and believed Holden when he told her.
I enjoyed Sam’s entry written from the point of view of Sally Hayes. It was written how I had imagined Sally would have talked, using words like “marvelous” a lot. I also thought it seemed realistic how Sally kept praising the Lunts and how great actors they were.
I liked Annie's story from Phoebe's point of view. I was able to tell it was from Phoebe's point of view without Annie telling the audience that it was Phoebe.
I also enjoyed Allan's story about Marice. It had nice sensory imagery. The sensory image I liked the most was the one about snowflakes coming down so hard that they stinged your face.
I found Ashley's style of writing in her story interesting. It was written as a script rather thana story t be read. I like it when people do different styles. I also like plays.
I liked Chris Blackwell’s response more than most for a few reasons. First he took the point of view of a character that many people didn’t attempt to do. Secondly I enjoyed his mix of both dialogue and personal thoughts. Finally I liked the inner thoughts he used for his character.
I liked Todd’s response to the point of view of Carl Luce. First off I liked the attitude he gave to Carl in his response. Secondly, not many other people had chose to do Carl Luce’s point of view. Finally I liked the situation Todd chose because it pertains to a big part of Holden’s need for help.
I liked Allan’s response to the point of view of Maurice. First, I enjoyed it because not many people chose this topic. Secondly, I liked how Allan thought of what Maurice would think of Holden. Finally I thought his response was a bit funny.
Justin E: i liked justin's journal from phoebe's point of view. he does a good job portraying the energy of a little girl. also he does a good job of translating phoebe's personality. he writes it as the author of a catcher in the rye would have.
Chris B: i enjoyed chris's version of how mrs. morrow responded to holden too. he does an excellent job showing how an average mother would truly respond and think in an incident like that. the mother is clueless to holden's lies too as a person would be as well
Allan C: i thought allan's journal from maurice's point of view was interesting as well. he did a good job describing how a person involved with prostitution would act. he portrayed maurice as guy who was just a little desperate for money. he also did a good job of giving maurice his own version of his personality. i liked allans thoughts.
I like Andrea’s account of the younger Jane playing checkers with Holden because it gives a deeper thought into what she could have been thinking at that point in her life. She thought of Jane during the recount of that rainy day when she was so frightened and clearly somewhat scared for her life. In this account the loving relationship of Jane and Holden shows how good of friends they are and how innocent they were when they were younger. She even comes out and just says, “I love him more than he will ever know.”
I like Michael Gonzalez’s account of Phoebe and Holden because of the innocence on display by Phoebe. With examples like packing the suitcases and giving Holden the red hunting cap, Phoebe shows that she really cares about him. She rides on a carousel and continues to be the little kid that she is, all innocent and cute. One more example of her childhood would be her love of zoos.
I like Allan’s account of Maurice and Holden’s conversation in the elevator because it is the perfect example that shows how morally corrupt the world has and is becoming. Maurice is a pimp and has prostitutes right at his disposal. Prostitution is illegal yet people still go against the laws and continues with it. There are some evil and corrupt people in this world that we should avoid if we can.
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